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Name:Rainkit, Rainpaw, Rain-(coming soon)
Gender: Female
Age: Seven moons
Breed: American shorthair
Rank: Wind Clan Apprentice
Personality: Rainpaw is shy, a bit plump not because she used to be a kitty-pet is because she is greedy with prey and when she was a kitten she was also greedy with milk, Curious she is a bit noisy to get in other apprentice's business, She is tidy and she is a bit fast and swift, she hates to be made fun off, She can be a bit hot-tempered once a fight is going on between two apprentice's.
=Apprentice/Mentor
=Family
=Acquaintance
= Friends
=Good Friends
=Crush
=Love
iscomfort/Dislike
History=
Rainpaw's mother died from blood loss and being chocked by a fox trap, so basically she died a horrible death.
Rainpaw's father died from dogs attacking him and eating him alive....yeah
Rainpaw never had a brother or sister so she was never a social cat. When she was 3 moons she had lived in a two leg home with her father and lived a pretty good life with her father until her two legs left her and her father alone after they moved. Rainpaw still keeps her collar in a safe place that she took off when she was four moons, and its not far from Windclan camp. She hopes to help her clan succeed in battles between clans or fight threw the famine.
RolePlaySample:
Rainpaw listened to the rain pound over the rock that she had chosen to stay over the night until she found WindClan camp again to submit her answer. She raised her tail and turned toward a sound, not rain, nor thunder. The apprentice stood up. Her green eyes flared. It was her mother, covered in blood. Her mother's slick black pelt drenched. "SAY YES! AND DON'T COME BACK!" she hissed. Rainpaw saw her mom caught in a fox trap. She couldn't bare it. She ran out of the den and went toward Windclan camp to submit her answer. She ran threw the undergrowth and each tree surrounding her or in her way she would jump on and finally leapt up a tree to glare around the forest. The rain was heavy where she was. She shifted her weight so she could stand evenly and not fall. There she sat and wept...(short and weird lol)
Gender: Female
Age: Seven moons
Breed: American shorthair
Rank: Wind Clan Apprentice
Personality: Rainpaw is shy, a bit plump not because she used to be a kitty-pet is because she is greedy with prey and when she was a kitten she was also greedy with milk, Curious she is a bit noisy to get in other apprentice's business, She is tidy and she is a bit fast and swift, she hates to be made fun off, She can be a bit hot-tempered once a fight is going on between two apprentice's.
=Apprentice/Mentor
=Family
=Acquaintance
= Friends
=Good Friends
=Crush
=Love
iscomfort/Dislike History=
Rainpaw's mother died from blood loss and being chocked by a fox trap, so basically she died a horrible death.
Rainpaw's father died from dogs attacking him and eating him alive....yeah
Rainpaw never had a brother or sister so she was never a social cat. When she was 3 moons she had lived in a two leg home with her father and lived a pretty good life with her father until her two legs left her and her father alone after they moved. Rainpaw still keeps her collar in a safe place that she took off when she was four moons, and its not far from Windclan camp. She hopes to help her clan succeed in battles between clans or fight threw the famine.
RolePlaySample:
Rainpaw listened to the rain pound over the rock that she had chosen to stay over the night until she found WindClan camp again to submit her answer. She raised her tail and turned toward a sound, not rain, nor thunder. The apprentice stood up. Her green eyes flared. It was her mother, covered in blood. Her mother's slick black pelt drenched. "SAY YES! AND DON'T COME BACK!" she hissed. Rainpaw saw her mom caught in a fox trap. She couldn't bare it. She ran out of the den and went toward Windclan camp to submit her answer. She ran threw the undergrowth and each tree surrounding her or in her way she would jump on and finally leapt up a tree to glare around the forest. The rain was heavy where she was. She shifted her weight so she could stand evenly and not fall. There she sat and wept...(short and weird lol)
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She's looking good so far! There are only a few things yet you need to do.
1. Tuxedo, while it is a fur pattern, is not an actual breed. She looks to me like an American longhair, but you can always browse the list of breeds.
2. It seems like her History section describes more of her personality, so you could probably move all that stuff into the Personality section. as for her History, you could focus more on what happened to her mom/parents and how that's affected her social life, what her goals are perhaps, and where she came from before she was accepted into WindClan.
3. There are a few spelling errors in the entire thing, so just be aware of those. c: if it would help i would suggest typing your RPs/descriptions out in a Word document and let the computer find the errors for you if you're having trouble! trust me, we should never be ashamed to use Spell Check, it is our friend..
once those things are changed you're good to go! so let me know when you have them done, and thanks for your interest in the group!
1. Tuxedo, while it is a fur pattern, is not an actual breed. She looks to me like an American longhair, but you can always browse the list of breeds.
2. It seems like her History section describes more of her personality, so you could probably move all that stuff into the Personality section. as for her History, you could focus more on what happened to her mom/parents and how that's affected her social life, what her goals are perhaps, and where she came from before she was accepted into WindClan.
3. There are a few spelling errors in the entire thing, so just be aware of those. c: if it would help i would suggest typing your RPs/descriptions out in a Word document and let the computer find the errors for you if you're having trouble! trust me, we should never be ashamed to use Spell Check, it is our friend..
once those things are changed you're good to go! so let me know when you have them done, and thanks for your interest in the group!